So I've been, err...poeming quite a lot lately, and...

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Well since these poems are actually song lyrics I'm just quickly brainstorming, think imma just put some of the most recent ones here. :)

---Plea---
Through the storms of the sadness
Barely crawling out of emptyness
Stuck in sticky scarring mess
But I will never care less
Through the fire that eats me alive
No matter into what void I dive
I'll scream your name as loud as I can
With the passion unseen by any man

Hear me out!
I will never have doubt!
You're all I am about!

I don't care how bad it is
I'll chase after one more kiss
Across the giant sea
I'll kneel for you and plea!!!

Through the doomsday impending
The louder end is calling
My cold cheeks it will carress
But I will never care less!
Even if I fear so much hatred
My love to you has always been so sacred
I'll yell your name as crazily as I want
With the romance unseen by any haunt

Listen to me!
I want you to be!
The angel that sets me free!

I don't care how bad it is
I'll chase after one more kiss
Across the giant sea
I'll kneel for you and plea!!!

I'M BEGGING YOU!

Hear my desperation!
Through all the devastation!
If you can't hear me at all
How can I not befall?

I don't care how bad it is
I'll chase after one more kiss
Across the giant sea
I'll kneel for you and plea!!!
I don't care how bad it is
I'll chase after one more kiss
Across the giant sea
I'll kneel for you and plea!!!!!!!


---Raining Away From Me---

Dear daylight, oh you and your secrets
Looking at me, seeing right through my regrets
Dear sunshine, oh you and your hiding
Where are you now when I need your caring?

An empty walk alone
Another step backward!!!

Just within reach from glory
In such an unreal story
Again all my love keeps fully
Raining away from me
It's storming so angrily
Like world hates my pride to be
As rain pours down truthfully
It's streaming away from me

Dear blue sky, you and your naughty view
What is that for when all you do is run away
Dear pure snow, oh your cute falling pursue
Can't see ahead, are you that evil in my way?

My void hurts me again
What could my life now gain?

Just within reach from glory
In such an unreal story
Again all my love keeps fully
Raining away from me
It's storming so angrily
Like world hates my pride to be
As rain pours down truthfully
It's streaming away from me

Will there be a time
We fall in same rhyme
Or will I still wait and see
Myself screaming a loud plea
That nobody ever hears
Because my biggest fears
Are to lose you forever
And have the rain flow it away forever!

No more of this...
I never asked for this...
But you're pouring on me again
Is my pain really in your game?

Just within reach from glory
In such an unreal story
Again all my love keeps fully
Raining away from me
It's storming so angrily
Like world hates my pride to be
As rain pours down truthfully
It's streaming away from me

Raining away from me
Streaming away from me
Raining away from me
Streaming away from me


This one's like, month old :)
---A reason to go forward---

The time has frozen
The pace is broken
Where do I burn
When the world fails to turn?

The snow is nice and smooth
But freezes and aches on my tooth
Too stale, too awkward
Is there a reason to go forward?


Fortunes come and go
Luckinesses rise and blow
What's the point of smiling
When one day dreams keep falling?

But I see an angel
A guardian that leaves a spell
"Find what makes you honored
A reason to go forward!!"

"FIND WHAT MAKES YOU HONOURED
A REASON TO GO FORWARD"

For you
My sweetshine
I'll do anything
To shine

For you
My sweetheart
I will play
My fortune card!!!

You would think that being happy
Is all theres to it to be
But without hope up ahead
You cant help but punch your own head
You need an inspiration
You need a destination
I can be all of the above
BECAUSE YOU'RE SO PRECIOUS MY LOVE

You are the wamrth that breezes me
Hugging me so tightly, so sweet
You are the reason I can be
The toughest man right on my feet
A beach love, a forest air
The justice force in life unfair
Find what makes you honored
A reason to go forward!!!

FIND WHAT MAKES YOU HONORED
A REASON TO GO FORWARD!!!

Don't look back!
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Try having a wider vocabulary range and calm the strong rhymes and use of exclamation, your words should stand without using them
They’re alright, lyrics or not (:
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gal wrote:Try having a wider vocabulary range and calm the strong rhymes and use of exclamation, your words should stand without using them
They’re alright, lyrics or not (:
It's just I imagine a certain melody while writing these so these exclamations are quite important for me cuz I imagine myself screamsinging at those bits ;)
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I'm gonna avoid giving feedback on your writing right now, instead I'll just ask some questions for now.

1) you said these poems are actually song lyrics, what genre(s) are you intending them to be categorised as?
2) do you have any bands/songs that inspired you to this writing style?
3) Do you wish to ever make actual music out of your writing or is it just a hobby for fun/to improve your writing/to went emotions/anything else?

I'm sorry if I'm prying to much but music writing is one of my many interests.
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Hey man looking good I enjoyed reading these. Perhaps a tip to recommend people to listen to a specific type of music whilst reading your poems as that can make a huge difference on how the poem is experienced. Just a quick youtube link down below would be sufficient. keep up the great work!
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Emziek wrote:I'm gonna avoid giving feedback on your writing right now, instead I'll just ask some questions for now.

1) you said these poems are actually song lyrics, what genre(s) are you intending them to be categorised as?
2) do you have any bands/songs that inspired you to this writing style?
3) Do you wish to ever make actual music out of your writing or is it just a hobby for fun/to improve your writing/to went emotions/anything else?

I'm sorry if I'm prying to much but music writing is one of my many interests.
1,2) Rock/Nu-Metal, kinda like Breaking Benjamin, Linkin Park, Five Finger Death Punch and etc.
3) Both actually! :dance:

And thanks Mystic! :romance-heartbeating: :romance-heartbeating: :romance-heartbeating:
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Some more I've written past month.

---Conquer my Sanity---

Embrace my body
Revolting right against you
Deeply look at me
Hugging me from outside through
Bite me really hard
Little bit of precious scent
Falling apart
As you take over all the hope I've spent

Recolouring me
Being jealous of me
Your naughty mind just cannot
Get enough of my hurtful spot


Kissing the darkness
Feeling the mindless
Rages all over
As it's all over
Now that you're in me


Eyes of the thief
Blowing in the winds of grief
Travelling through me
Whatever disease you can be

Ambushing my brain
Why am I here, what is my reign
Stabbing in my heart
Why is my sight losing so much art?

Recolouring me
Being jealous of me
Your naughty mind just cannot
Get enough of my hurtful spot


Kissing the darkness
Feeling the mindless
Rages all over
As it's all over
Now that you're in me


You will never be pleasant
You are the fake heaven
And that is the lesson
GET OUT OF MY
LIFE!!!!

Kissing the darkness
Feeling the mindless
Rages all over
As it's all over
Now that you're in me

My sanity
Has been conqured
Why am i bothered
When I'm deep in insanity
What does matter anymore
I can't feel no more
What am I here for
Why


---All things come and go---

You'd believe your smile will be all eternal
But when you do your blood goes rough and infernal
Waiting for a bite right on the nerve
Little bit of downfall for dinner to serve
You'd believe you keep your demons forever
But precious friends come to you shouting "never!"
You can't focus your mind on worse or better
But how can you value one without the other!

You want the clear skies today...
But they have been clouded away!!!
You want it to rain all of the day
But happiness is in the way!!

ALL THINGS COME AND GO
ALL THINGS RISE AND FALL

You have a love, you'd want to kiss her forever
But she has faded away, is that for the better?
In silence you stand while you want to get her back
But in the same time, we're too far in the black
Head fevers not knowing what it values
Give me a hint, give me the clues!
You can't focus your mind on worse or better
But how can you value one without the other?


You want the clear skies today...
But they have been clouded away!!!
You want it to rain all of the day
But happiness is in the way!!

ALL THINGS COME AND GO
ALL THINGS RISE AND FALL

" You can't focus your mind on worse or better
But how can you value one without the other?"


---When you're missing---

The moment that I met you
I felt the love within you
Burried so deep inside
Can't and won't put it aside

Your breath, your hair, your words
Are the most precious chords
If all of them where gone
I'd never see a new dawn!


I love you so much
I fall in dread every time we avoid to touch
I love you so much
When you're missing it's colorless like in a hutch


You are my one and only
Filling a smile all over me
With you right by my side
My hope grows stronger inside

You're so inspiring I could lift a moon
You're so inspiring I could kill a doom
You're so sweet and beautiful
Without you around, it's bleak and pitiful


I love you so much
I fall in dread every time we avoid to touch
I love you so much
When you're missing it' colorless like in a hutch

Never leave me
Never leave me
I don't care how much I'd have to plea
With you gone I'm lost at a dried up sea

Never leave me again
Never leave me again
You're the only reason I carry on
Don't leave my head, let us go on!!!


---Deep in my head---


What is wrong with me today
My thoughts like skies, they flow away
Every second I breathe, every time I heartbeat
With that new scent nearby I feel so sweet

Mind feels so numb and lost
My fire's swallowed by cold frost
And you know me, I am the frost lord
With you so deep in my head I hear the most beautiful chord...


Just the tiniest thought about you
Makes me kneel and crumble before you
Heart pounds so crazily, Blood flows so fearlessly
I'm out of control, I want to love you so shamelessly...


What is wrong with me today
Can't even move anywhere away
I sink so deep in your smell
I feek like I'm cursed and poisoned by witches spell

How are you stuck so deep inside my mind
Inside my heart and veins, what more of you will I find?
And you know me, without you I'm bored
With you so deep in my head I hear the most beautiful chord...

Just the tiniest thought about you
Makes me kneel and crumble before you
Heart pounds so crazily, Blood flows so fearlessly
I'm out of control, I want to love you so shamelessly...


My princess!!
You infest
My mindless
Desires
All over
My honour
I love you
Never leave you
Astray...
Never push you
Away...
Because you are stuck so deep in my head
If you fall, I fall, If you're dead, i am dead...
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Wrote this one just a few mins ago, a quick 15 min brainstorm.

---Yet another miss---

So many years went past
Not knowing just how fast
The one and only love can
Fly by you in just one cast

So many times I've tried
To follow the wholesome kind
But does it matter at all
When pleasure does nothing but hide?

Why, why, just why won't you
Feel the same way I do
No matter how sweet is our kiss
I can't be loved, stuck in abyss
Why, why, just why won't you
Think the same way I do
Another hug turned into fading bliss
Before I realise it's a yet another miss

To be with you...

So many hours I've spent
To show you what I meant
But with the wrong values
The sun up there can only be loose

So many tears I've thrown
Out of being alone
But it won't change a thing
No matter how great am I being

Why, why, just why won't you
Feel the same way I do
No matter how sweet is our kiss
I can't be loved, stuck in abyss
Why, why, just why won't you
Think the same way I do
Another hug turned into fading bliss
Before I realise it's a yet another miss

To be with you...

I would do anything to complete you
It would help with everything to complete me
But fate puts me so far away from you
Is there anything left for me?

Why, why, just why won't you
Feel the same way I do
No matter how sweet is our kiss
I can't be loved, stuck in abyss
Why, why, just why won't you
Think the same way I do
Another hug turned into fading bliss
Before I realise it's a yet another miss

To be with you...
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Breaking Benjamin is the best.
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